When I began the re-write of Haphazardly Implausible I realized there were things which needed to be addressed. Highest on the list were Isidore Thaddeus Reichmann and Jack O'Malley. With the help of my friend I was able to fix them up considerably. I'm pleased with the results and thought I'd share.
With Isidore I had Hogan hire him rather than Morcoft. I also changed his grumpiness into grieving - for those who have read the books you might understand this part, for those who haven't you'll have to read it when I publish them again. (Evil me.)
I'm not going to talk about Isidore in this post though, but Jack O'Malley.
For those who don't know or need a reminder, Jack is a British girl who joins Isidore when he's searching for Peter Jones. She tags along with him and it is revealed later she was running away from home.
When I went back over the first book I realized I didn't really like Jack. She was manipulative, whiny, and just generally annoying. I decided she needed a completely new character and back story. I even decided she needed a new name, since I couldn't even remember why I named her Jack in the first place. (I think it started back when I was plotting the book, around the time I got my own nickname of Jack.)
Jack O'Malley is now Nellie O'Malley.
Nellie still meets Isidore before any of the other characters, Hogan not counting. She lives in London with her father who works for the queen of England. While she doesn't exactly work with her father she does help him from time to time on his different cases or missions. (Her father is something like a secret agent, a cross between a detective and a spy.)
One day while working a case, Nellie's dad disappears. Alone, Nellie does everything she can to find him and that is how she crosses paths with Isidore. Disguised as a street urchin, she helps him out of a near robbery and learns he is a detective. She convinces him to help her find her father.
I have to admit, I am getting tired of 1800's feminists in books. I want to read about a girl who loves being a girl, who loves dresses and tea and going to balls. Since I couldn't find one I decided I'd try and compensate with Nellie.
Nellie and her father would be considered rich. They have a nice house, Nellie attends something like a boarding school, and she likes to wear nice dresses. She is very lady like and really loves her tea time. That said, she isn't the sort who will shrink from danger and if a loved one is in need of her services she will do anything for them.
I'm really excited now for Nellie to come into the story and to work on fixing her and Isidore's roles in the books. I'm hoping to give them more depth and make them far better characters, now that I understand more about characters.
And that is all I have today. I'm going to try and write now, if I can stay awake long enough.
Quote is from Doctor Who. From the fabulous Rory Williams.