Tuesday, October 13, 2015

"Hitler, shut up."

 Wherein Jack made discoveries.

 When I began the re-write of Haphazardly Implausible I realized there were things which needed to be addressed. Highest on the list were Isidore Thaddeus Reichmann and Jack O'Malley. With the help of my friend I was able to fix them up considerably. I'm pleased with the results and thought I'd share.

 With Isidore I had Hogan hire him rather than Morcoft. I also changed his grumpiness into grieving - for those who have read the books you might understand this part, for those who haven't you'll have to read it when I publish them again. (Evil me.)

 I'm not going to talk about Isidore in this post though, but Jack O'Malley.

 For those who don't know or need a reminder, Jack is a British girl who joins Isidore when he's searching for Peter Jones. She tags along with him and it is revealed later she was running away from home.

 When I went back over the first book I realized I didn't really like Jack. She was manipulative, whiny, and just generally annoying. I decided she needed a completely new character and back story. I even decided she needed a new name, since I couldn't even remember why I named her Jack in the first place. (I think it started back when I was plotting the book, around the time I got my own nickname of Jack.)

 Jack O'Malley is now Nellie O'Malley.

 Nellie still meets Isidore before any of the other characters, Hogan not counting. She lives in London with her father who works for the queen of England. While she doesn't exactly work with her father she does help him from time to time on his different cases or missions. (Her father is something like a secret agent, a cross between a detective and a spy.)

 One day while working a case, Nellie's dad disappears. Alone, Nellie does everything she can to find him and that is how she crosses paths with Isidore. Disguised as a street urchin, she helps him out of a near robbery and learns he is a detective. She convinces him to help her find her father.

 I have to admit, I am getting tired of 1800's feminists in books. I want to read about a girl who loves being a girl, who loves dresses and tea and going to balls. Since I couldn't find one I decided I'd try and compensate with Nellie.

 Nellie and her father would be considered rich. They have a nice house, Nellie attends something like a boarding school, and she likes to wear nice dresses. She is very lady like and really loves her tea time. That said, she isn't the sort who will shrink from danger and if a loved one is in need of her services she will do anything for them.

 I'm really excited now for Nellie to come into the story and to work on fixing her and Isidore's roles in the books. I'm hoping to give them more depth and make them far better characters, now that I understand more about characters.

 And that is all I have today. I'm going to try and write now, if I can stay awake long enough.

 Quote is from Doctor Who. From the fabulous Rory Williams.



  1. Ooooooh I am liking the new developments!

  2. Hm, I'm liking it so far. I will admit, Jack did confuse me for the first two books. I wasn't sure if she had a family, didn't have a family, why she ran from her father, etc. This makes way more sense for her! Also, Isidore's grieving makes more sense too.

    Although, I did kind of like how Isidore was working for Morcoft. Just because it added more tension in the book for him. He thought he was doing the right thing originally. And then he wasn't sure and had to figure out what was going on. But that's okay. I still love Isidore. :D He's one of my favorites. As well as Aden. I LOVE Aden so much! Ahem. . .

  3. I'm... divided on this one. I LIKED the backstory you gave her, the story of how a girl was accidentally named Jack. True, she needed an attitude adjustment, but she never felt unfeminine to me, she just felt like a character who needed growth - which I saw her getting. Also ... the name Nellie reminds me of the American Girl, which isn't a bad connotation, but, *shrug.*

    I understand with Isidore ... but do you have to change her this drastically? (Because by doing that, you're destroying one of my favorite Aden scenes in Abolished Impracticality!)

    1. Nellie O'Malley actually is the name of the American Girl, well, of Samantha's best friend.

      Sounds interesting. I don't really like girl characters who don't like being girls.

      And I love that Doctor Who quote. And Rory. And that episode.

    2. I was just about to say the same thing about the name, Morgan and Kendra. ;)

      Yay, a non-feminist girl! Those tend to be hard to come by. I like dresses, and tea, but I'm not afraid to get dirty, so yay. Someone like me.

      I can't wait to read it when you finish. :D

  4. Hmmm, Nellie/Jack sounds intriguing - it will definitely be interesting to see what you do with all that. I remember being very confused by how old Jack was... and not liking that I thought she was like 10 and masquerading as Isidore's wife, when it felt like Isidore was somewhere in his thirties. (That was just the sense I got, I don't think you put their ages in anywhere, so I was going off of character feel and that there was some large age disparity between them, also, Jack felt on the extremely immature/naive side, and so I guessed 10). LOL I could definitely see this working... especially the liking dresses bit (especially if you still have her appear as a street urchin and Isidore thinks that's all she is and she could totally play it up when he buys her clothes... if that bit is even still in the book...) though I agree with Kendra, I liked the nickname "Jack" for her and the backstory with that.

    Yay Doctor Who! Yay Rory!

  5. I am rewriting a book right now too, mine is going horribly. It's nice to see that changes in a book can be a good thing. I need to remember that.


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